Your intentions are good with this presentation, but there are a lot of issues within it that we have to look at and fix.
The main one is the path and the way you tell the story. It is sloppy at best and there are some confusing parts in it. I would like for you to present each of the main characters and give us a bit more of a description and maybe a pic for each one. Then go back and see if the story makes since to someone who doesn't know the play. I do, and I was still a bit confused.
Then you need to fix your grammatical errors. There are a ton. Capitol letters, punctuation are a must in this type of presentation. Remember that this isn't a text message.
The randomness is funny because I know you, but it isn't universal. Like NARNIA in the Prezi is great because of our show, but would it make sense to someone outside of the department?
Please take the time to fix these and please also put the works cited in the presentation.
Your intentions are good with this presentation, but there are a lot of issues within it that we have to look at and fix.
ReplyDeleteThe main one is the path and the way you tell the story. It is sloppy at best and there are some confusing parts in it. I would like for you to present each of the main characters and give us a bit more of a description and maybe a pic for each one. Then go back and see if the story makes since to someone who doesn't know the play. I do, and I was still a bit confused.
Then you need to fix your grammatical errors. There are a ton. Capitol letters, punctuation are a must in this type of presentation. Remember that this isn't a text message.
The randomness is funny because I know you, but it isn't universal. Like NARNIA in the Prezi is great because of our show, but would it make sense to someone outside of the department?
Please take the time to fix these and please also put the works cited in the presentation.