This is a lot of information. I think you did a nice job of presenting the plot with some modern language that a student would appreciate. There are some pictures to assist in the telling of the story as well.
Some items to fix: 1. The main one is the way the Prezi is presented. You have information that I cannot see because of the way you created the path. Further research how to capture a whole image. 2. There is too much plot without a major through line. I think you need to set us up with major characters and major plotlines. Don't get bogged down with details. 3. Think about other major issues with the text itself. Why is it important or not. 4. There are grammatical errors (spelling and punctuation) to fix. Do this.
From here we can see where else we can go. Remember to think BIG PICTURE.
This is a lot of information. I think you did a nice job of presenting the plot with some modern language that a student would appreciate. There are some pictures to assist in the telling of the story as well.
ReplyDeleteSome items to fix:
1. The main one is the way the Prezi is presented. You have information that I cannot see because of the way you created the path. Further research how to capture a whole image.
2. There is too much plot without a major through line. I think you need to set us up with major characters and major plotlines. Don't get bogged down with details.
3. Think about other major issues with the text itself. Why is it important or not.
4. There are grammatical errors (spelling and punctuation) to fix. Do this.
From here we can see where else we can go. Remember to think BIG PICTURE.
And your sources please!
ReplyDeleteI added my sources
ReplyDeleteThanks for the sources. I don't think that you cut much. It is still a whole lotta plot without the big picture created for the audience.
ReplyDeleteAlso, sentences begin with capitol letters. Right...
Argh!
ReplyDeleteCapitol letters begin sentences!!!
I'm sorry, I usually get over this, but it's so rampant that it's difficult to get through the presentation.
Still way too much information. OVERVIEW!
And there is an image that is a bit suggestive. Can you take this out?
Keep going.