Jordan, this is nice beginning to the project. I liked your language, although a bit crass at times, and the way that you have made it accessible for a younger audience. I also like your animations and the story telling.
There are some issues to resolve.
1. I don't get the overall story of Cymbeline. I can tell that you have reduced \parts of the story, but the through line isn't there. Think big picture.
2. It is difficult to separate each of the characters. They all look the same. Maybe pick different characters?
3. Look at some of the crasser language and make it acceptable in school.
4. Works cited.
Start there and get back to me when you have updated.
Domo Animate: 
Jordan, this is nice beginning to the project. I liked your language, although a bit crass at times, and the way that you have made it accessible for a younger audience. I also like your animations and the story telling.
ReplyDeleteThere are some issues to resolve.
1. I don't get the overall story of Cymbeline. I can tell that you have reduced \parts of the story, but the through line isn't there. Think big picture.
2. It is difficult to separate each of the characters. They all look the same. Maybe pick different characters?
3. Look at some of the crasser language and make it acceptable in school.
4. Works cited.
Start there and get back to me when you have updated.
Thanks!